广东英语高考写作点拨

广东英语高考写作点拨

高考解题指南 2007-05-10 22:37:25 阅读104 评论0   字号：大中小 订阅

广东省2007年高考英语试题改革，原书面表达题改成“基础写作”和“任务型写作”或叫“写作１”和“写作２”，赋分值各为15分和25分。现结合例题谈谈这两种写作新题型的写作思路，供考生参考。

 一、基础写作

    基础写作和以往的书面表达一样给考生提供情景，情景说明可以是“文字”“漫画”“图文结”。但有苛刻的限制：只能用５个句子表达所有的“情景”内容，而且要有（至少）３个复合句。我们认为，之所以这样要求是要考生注意在写作中提高使用语言的档次，考查考生真正驾驭语言的能力。

    请看下例： 写作1 （共1小题；满分15分）请根据以下的情景说明，使用5个规范的英语句子描述所给的全部信息内容。 (看不到图,请点击标题打开或下载,就有图了)

【情景说明】

 1．星期日早上去银行取钱。

2．摩托车锁在树上，放心离去。

3．银行出来，车不见。

4．砍树，偷车。

5．狡猾小偷。

【写作要求】

1. 标题。

2. 必须使用5个句子介绍所给的全部内容。

3. 将5个句子组成连贯的短文，必须保证有3个句子为复合句。

4. 字数要求：60—80字。

【写作思路】

    这是一篇既有图画又有文字提供背景的基础写作题。故事很简单，考生在写的过程中不要考虑太复杂，以免写偏题。要求中的第一项就是“标题”，所以我们的作文如果没有题目，会被扣掉1—2分。该作文题目可以从thief或owner of the lost两方面考虑，比如：A sly thief/A clever thief/What a thief或An unhappy day/What a day等。当然题目最好要和所给的“情景”有明显的联系，该题“情景说明”的第5点明显指出了：狡猾的小偷。背景中的失主没有给出名字，所以写的时候还要给他起一个名字。可能用到的词汇：取钱get/draw/collect money from a bank；锁在……上lock …onto…/chain…to…/tie…to…；砍树cut down the tree(s)

【范文赏读】

    A sly Thief One Sunday morning, Mr. Zhang went to draw some money from the bank on his motorbike. When he arrived, he found no Park there and in order to avoid the motorbike being stolen, Mr. Zhang locked his motorbike onto the two big strong trees before he entered the bank. Unfortunately, when he came out he found (that) his motorbike was lost. The two big trees were cut down and his motorbike was gone. He said angrily: “What a sly thief.”

【范文评析】

    所给范文用了约80个英语单词按题目要求简明扼要地描述了所发生的故事。文章虽短，也有三个部分：第一句是第一部分，交代了故事的时间、地点、人物等；从第二句到文章的倒数第二句为第二部分，描述了事情的主要经过；最后一句是第三部分，表达了失主无可奈何的情感。文章用词朴素、叙事清晰，无多余的所谓“发挥”或“想象”。句式活跃，全文除用了when/before/when/that引导的四个从句外，还有两个由and连接的并列句，一个作直接宾语的感叹句“What a sly thief!” 一个动名词的复合结构“the motorbike being stolen”等，另外，在叙事中表达情绪活动的Unfortunately也使用得恰到好处。

二、任务型写作

     任务型写作虽然没有明显的条条框框限制，但在难度上却大得多。词数上要求150词左右，而且还有一篇200词左右的英语原文要阅读，并且必须将所阅读的文章加以小结作为自己作文的开头。

请看下例：

写作2 （共1小题；满分25分）

    请根据以下的任务和写作要求，写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

【任务说明】

    请你就“为什么有些孩子不能按照父母的要求去做而有些孩子很听话？”这一话题写一篇文章。在写作之前，你要查阅相关资料，请认真阅读下面的短文，然后完成以下任务。

1. 概括短文的内容要点。

2. 说明青少年孩子和父母之间格格不入或相处得融洽的原因。

3. 你如何看待这个问题？

【写作要求】

    你可以使用实例或其它论述方法支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不要抄袭阅读材料中的句子。

【阅读材料】

     When parents make a lot of rules about their children’s behaviour, they make trouble—— for themselves. I used to spend half my time making sure my rules were obeyed, and the other half answering questions like “Jack can get up whenever he likes, so why can’t I?” or “Why can’t I play with Angela? Jack’s mum doesn’t mind who he play with.” Or “Jack can drink anything he likes. Why can’t I drink wine too?” Jack’s mum, I decided, was a wise woman. I started saying things like “Of course, dear. You can drink as much wine as you like.” and “No, I don’t mind how late you get up.” and “Yes, dear, you can play with Angela as often as you like.” The results have been marvelous. They don’t want to get up late any more; they’ve stopped playing with Angela. I’ve now realized (as Jack’s mum realized a long time ago) that they only wanted to do these nasty things because they weren’t allowed to.

【写作思路】

     阅读所给的材料不难看出:两种不同的管理孩子的方法,结果父母们的感受截然不同。你越是想要“管”住孩子，孩子们越是不听你的那一套。相反，你以不同的方式、从不同的角度或侧面向孩子们提出你想要他们接受的问题，和他们进行“讨论”，让他们自己做出判断，效果会出乎意料的好，他们会对你心服口服。究其原因，孩子们的好奇心和精力旺盛使然；孩子们的逆反心理也是不可忽视的原因。【范文赏读】

     Like many other things, parents are also different from one another. Some are eager to control their children’s behaviour or get their children “protected” under their wings and do everything for them. Some are acting just the opposite; They never say to their children what the children must do or must obey, etc. But what is the strangest is that those who wanted to make rules to control their children felt troubled, because their children never obeyed the rules. And those who let their children act freely are always feeling the children do as they wished. Why are the results of the two ways of managing children so different? The reasons lie in, I think, first and the most, children are usually vigorous energetic and curious. They feel everything fresh and eagerly like to put their noses into what they cannot get or get in touch with easily. If they can touch the thing easily they will not be feeling curious about it and act normally. Another reason may be that most of the young are likely to go against “the trend of the times” and disobey others. If we can discuss with them about what we want them to accept or do, they will probably feel it easy to, and will happily obey you. So I think the art of helping the children grow is very important.

【范文评析】

    范文开门见山指出为人父母有两类不同类型。全文四个自然段里，第一、二自然段很好地总结了原材料，第三、四自然段明确地阐释了自己对这种现象的看法并且提出了帮助孩子们成长的艺术十分关键。第一段点出两种现象；第二段进一步阐释这两种现象所得出的截然不同的结果；第三自然段详细讨论了这种现象产生的两个原因；第四自然段指出如何避免这种现象。范文语言流畅，主从复合句使用自然得体；段落与段落之间的转折自如。第三段开头的问句Why…?起着承上启下的作用，很自然地由“对原文的总结过渡到阐释自己的看法”。