神马文学网高考英语满分作文
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全国卷I：满分范文一
满分文(一)
Dear Peter,
I am writing to ask whether you are able to do me a favor.
Since Im quite interested in English, I would like to make an English pen friend to improve my writing. Can you introduce one to me? My ideal pen friend should be of my age, and a boy will be better. A boy who likes traveling and football will be a good candidate.
In my opinion, the guy of my age will share almost the same experiences as me and it is easier to talk to each other. We can share our feelings of traveling and football. If possible, I hope that he likes pets. Hope you can find me an ideal pen friend.Thank you.
Best regards,
Li Hua
名师点评：
本文属于比较“平”的文章，即稳中求胜。文章没有华丽的词语，但是使用了一些短语和结构，能够获得老师的欣赏。首句是个原因状语从句。文章也运用了定语从句来修饰boy，比较好。If possible这个省略句则表明作者对这类状语从句的熟悉。
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好词：1. candidate n.候选人2.share with 与…分享
好句：In my opinion, the guy of my age will share almost the same experiences as me and it is easier to talk to each other.在我看来，像我这样年龄的男生和我会有更多的共同语言。
好处：复杂句的组合很好。
满分文(二)
Dear Peter,
I am writing to ask whether you are able to do me a favor.
I have been learning English for two years and I hope to find an English pen friend so that I can get more improvement. Can you help me to find one?
Id like to have a boy, who is of my age and is fond of traveling and sports, to be my pen friend. In my opinion, people of the same age often have something to exchange. Thats why I want him to be of my age. If he likes doggy, that would be better because I can tell him something about my little doggy.Id be very thankful if you can help me. Hope to hear from you!
Best regards,
Li Hua
名师点评：
从整体上来说，本文写得还是符合要求的，内容完整，要点和结构也很齐全。语言的使用不在于华丽的辞藻而在于其一些复杂句子的组织。最值得我们学习的就是像好词和好句中列举的表达法。全文流畅而连贯，适合于模仿。
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好词1.improvement n 改进2.do sb. a favor 帮助某人3. doggy n.小狗
好句1. Id like to have a boy, who is of my age and is fond of traveling and sports, to be my pen friend.我想寻找一个和我年纪相仿，喜欢旅游、体育的男孩来做我的笔友。
好处：of my age 年纪相仿；be fond of 喜欢。
2.Thats why I want him to be of my age，这就是为什么我希望笔友跟我年纪相仿的原因。
好处：用why引导的从句做表语从句。
全国卷II：满分范文一
【满分范文】
满分文(一)
Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!
Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.
500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides singleperson room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 doubleperson rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!
Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.
名师点评：
本文开门见山，首先点明了主旨。本文最大的特点是应用了很多比较复杂的句式，使文章比较出彩。开头使用了独立结构交代宾馆位置。which引导的非限制性定语从句的使用也很正确。总地来说，文章句式精炼，是篇不错的满分作文。
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好词1. provide v.提供2. convenience n.便利
好句All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable.
所有这些服务都会给你带来便利，并且非常的愉快。
好处：bring great convenience，带来便利。
满分文(二)
Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!
Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.
The hotel is located 500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, a very convenient position to go sightseeing in the Baishan Mountain. There are two kinds of rooms for service: singleperson room, 20 in total and RMB 100 yuan per day and doubleperson room, 15 in total and RMB 150 yuan per day. The hot water bath is provided as well. We serve both Chinses and western food in the restaurant as well as coffee and tea in the cafe. All are provided in a short time. The swimming pool, which is open for the whole day, is free for you to come.
We accept booking rooms ahead of time. So come and enjoy!
名师点评：
本文叙述比较详细，使用了比较复杂的句式和短语。首句的伴随状语用得很好。在介绍房间类型时，作者使用了简短的对比句式，很精炼。作者还使用了定语从句which，同时在描述酒店的两种价格的时候也很恰当，语句生动而不重复。
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好词1. sightseeing n.观光旅游2. book v.登记；预订
好句1. The hotel is located 500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, a very convenient position to go sightseeing in the Baishan Mountain. 宾馆在距离白山入口处500米的地方，这对于参观白山来说是一个很方便的位置。
好处：伴随状语的使用很到位。
2. The swimming pool, which is open for the whole day, is free for you to come.
游泳池全天免费开放。
好处：which引导了非限制性定语从句。
北京卷：满分范文一
【满分范文】
第一节情景作文
满分文(一)
Dear Harry,
How are things going?
Last Monday, my class held the monitor election, a fierce competition between two students really. First, the two candidates, Liu Dong and Wang Hong, gave their election speeches respectively. Then other students wrote a name of the candidate on paper and put it into a box. The teacher counted the number of pieces of paper voting for the two candidates fairly. Finally, Wang Hong got 28 votes while Liu Dong got 15. So Wang Hong became our monitor. It was an interesting election, isnt it? Hope to hear from you.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
名师点评：
本文叙述内容完整而翔实。最突出的优点就是结构分明。作者通过使用了first，then，finally等表示顺序的词语，使文章层次感显得很强。其次，词语句式方面，作者也以简单句为主，增加了一份简练，流畅而自然。
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好词1.respectively ad.各自地2.vote v. 选举3.election n. 选举 4. fierce a.激烈的
好句1. Last Monday, my class held the monitor election, a fierce competition between two students really.上周一，我们班举行了一次班长选举，两个候选人竞争激烈。
好处：句式的使用很有特点。
2. Wang Hong got 28 votes while Liu Dong got 15.
王红得到了28票，而刘东得到了15票。
好处：while的使用很地道，表示并列情形。
满分文(二)
Dear Harry,
How are things going?
Last Monday, our class held the monitor election. The two candidates gave their speeches first and after that other students put the paper with the name of the ideal monitor into a box. The teacher made a calculation of the number of names voted by other students. At last the result was: Wang Hong got 28 votes while Liu Dong got 15. In that sense, Wang Hong won the election.
Id like to know how the monitor election is conducted in your class.Hope to hear from you.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
名师点评：
本文叙事平稳，内容完整。词语使用平实，语法运用恰到好处，以准确的表达拿到比较高的分数。本文按图叙事，用first, after that, at last连接，结构分明。长短句综合运用，句式富于变化。
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好词1. calculation n.计算2.candidate n.候选人
好句1. The teacher made a calculation of the number of names voted by other students.
老师将其他同学选出的名字加以汇总。
好处：voted，动词的过去分词作状语。
2. Id like to know how the monitor election is conducted in your class.
我想知道你们班班长竞选是如何进行的。
好处：how引导的从句做宾语。
第二节开放作文
There is a bird in the nest in the tree. She is the mother of her four children. Seeing her children flying happily in the sky, she feels very delighted. The four birds will be able to live independently and another circle of life will begin. How wonderful nature is!
名师点评：
本文发挥想象，设想四只小鸟即将飞离母亲的庇护去自己生存，并由此引出生命轮回。文章想象合理，展开得很恰当。语言生动而形象，作为一篇小作文，不但恰当而且值得学习。
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好词：1.independently ad.独立地2. another circle of life生命的新轮回
好句：Seeing her children flying happily in the sky, she feels very delighted.
看到孩子们在空中自由地翱翔，她感到很愉悦。
好处：现在分词作状语表示伴随状态。
上海卷：满分范文
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Xiao Hong, our monitor and one of my good friends, got a cold last Monday and has been in hospital for three days. We suggested seeing her to show our concern. So yesterday we went to the hospital. Since I have known for long that Xiao Hong is fond of doggy, I bought a very cute doggy toy before going there.
On seeing the toy, Xiao Hong couldnt help screaming. She hugged the toy which was so lovely and cute again and again. She was moved because we all came to see her. We expressed our hope that she could recover as soon as possible. I told her that the doggy represented my hope of her recovering and my cherishing of our friendship. I believe she will be well soon and come back to us again!
名师点评：
本文的写作让我们再一次领略到上海作文的水平。我觉得其优势主要体现在，其一，用词准确生动，即通过有难度的词汇的使用，将作者的意思准确地加以表达；其二，句式的变换和语法的应用，即表达的问题。上述二者兼而有之，分数怎能不高？
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好词：1. concern n.关心2. screaming a.尖叫的3.hug v.拥抱4.cherish v.珍爱
好句：1. We suggested seeing her to show our concern.
我们建议去看看她以表示我们对她的关心。
好处：suggest doing，建议做什么。
2. I told her that the doggy represented my hope of her recovering and my cherishing of our friendship.
我告诉她这个小狗代表了我希望她康复的愿望和对于我们友谊的珍爱。
好处：意思表达十分准确。
天津卷：满分范文一
【满分范文】
满分文(一)
How to Protect Our Eyesight
As we can see in the picture, nowadays most students wear glasses because they are shortsighted due to high study pressure. With the help of glasses, they can see the blackboard clearly.
This phenomenon must be paid attention to. We should reduce the time of reading and when we read, do read in the bright place so as to protect our eyes. Besides, the eye exercises are another way to keep eyes healthy. After school, wed better get more sleep so that the eyes can get more rest.
As the saying goes, eyes are the window of our hearts. If you can follow the methods mentioned above, you can surely have a good eyesight.
名校点评：
本文采用三段论的方式，分析图画，提出建议，提出希望，叙述比较详细。文中用了两个伴随状语，使得文章非常连贯。这个独立结构也很好。此外，作者还是用了比较复杂的句子，We should reduce the...采用复合结构，讲出了多个保护视力的要点。
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好词1. phenomenon n.现象2. so as to 以便
好句1. With the help of glasses, they can see the blackboard clearly.
在眼镜的辅助之下，他们才能将黑板看得更清楚。
好处：with引导状语表示伴随。
2. As the saying goes, eyes are the window of our hearts.
众所周知的是，眼睛是心灵的窗户。
好处：谚语的使用增光添彩。
满分文(二)
How to Protect Our Eyesight
Look at the picture and you will find the worrying phenomenon: most students now wear glasses. Because of unhealthy ways of using eyes and high study pressure, students get shortsighted easily.
However, we can do something to protect our eyes from getting shortsighted. When reading, make sure you are in the bright place and let your eyes rest every hour. If your eyes are aching,doing some eye exercises can relieve your eye tiredness. It will be good to your eyes to take enough sleep. I believe you can protect your eyes if you follow the tips.
Hope every one of you have a clear world!
名师点评：
本文审题准确，要点完整而齐全。从结构来说，首先提出问题，其次讨论如何及为什么需要解决问题。文章长短句结合使用，句式变换而流畅。文章用词地道而成熟，可以称得上是一篇不错的考场佳作。
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好词1. ache v. 疼痛2. pressure n. 压力3. relieve v.缓解
好句1. However, we can do something to protect our eyes from getting shortsighted.
然而我们可以采取一些措施来保护我们的眼睛免于近视。
好处：do something to，采取措施。
2. If your eyes are aching, doing some eye exercise can relieve your eye tiredness.
如果你的眼睛感到疼痛，做眼操可以缓解你的视力疲劳。
好处：动名词作主语引导从句。
重庆卷：满分范文一
【满分范文】
满分文(一)
Dear Amy,
Im Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China. Im sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain. But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future. So, stand up and fight against the disease! Im sure you will win. It is reported that the America anticancer association will donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive. So I will tell your situation to all my friends and ask them to write to you. In that way, you will get enough money for you to be cured. Hope you can be well soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
名师点评：
本文依照要求，涵盖了所有要点。文章使用了高中常见的句式，如Im sorry to hear that..., It is reported that...等，都比较好。作者对定语从句的使用恰到好处地修饰了文章，行文自然而通顺，值得学习。
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好词1.realize v.意识到2.promise v.允诺3.donate v.捐赠
好句1. Im sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brings you great pain.
我很遗憾地得知你身患肺癌，给你带来了巨大的痛苦。
好处：which引导限制性定语从句。
2. So, stand up and fight against the disease!
因此，坚强地与疾病做斗争吧！
好处：掷地有声，语言准确。
满分文(二)
Dear Amy,
My name is Li Hua, a student from Xinhua Middle School in China. I have got to know that you got lung cancer and are in great pain. Sorry to hear that. But since you are young, the disease wont be very serious and you can beat it. It is said that the more letters you receive, the more money the America anticancer association will donate. For every letter, they give three cents. So I will try as hard as possible to persuade my friends to write to you so as to help you get enough money to cure the disease. Im sure you will be OK soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
名师点评：
文章整体来说一气呵成，衔接自然。通过诸如原因状语从句的使用，使得文章内容饱满，过渡自然，较好地使用了诸如but，so之类的连词。文章使用了“the +比较级，the +比较级”的句式，十分出彩。
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好词1. cure v.治愈2. association n.协会3.donate v.捐赠
好句1. But since you are young, the disease wont be very serious and you can beat it.
但是因为你还比较年轻，疾病不会很严重，你能够战胜它。
好处：since，引导原因状语从句。
2. It is said that the more letters you receive, the more money the America anticancer association will donate.
据说你收到的信越多，美国抗癌组织捐给你的钱就越多。
好处：the +比较级，表示强调。
江苏卷：满分范文一
【满分范文】
满分文(一)
Good afternoon, everyone,
The national student sports program, waged by the Ministry of Education and aimed at improving students health, was held from 10：00am~11:00am on April 29，2007 in many primary and middle schools all over China. Almost 11 million students in Jiangsu province participated in this program.
The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years. Our whole life will be very enjoyable.
In my opinion, we senior high school students should do exercises for one hour a day even though our spare time is limited. Health is a basic condition for our study. If we did not do exercises, we wouldnt be able to get good study records. So every one of you, join the program now!
Thank you!
名师点评：
本文的结构十分明晰，同时句式使用得熟练而准确。本文分为三段，前两段叙述，后一段发表观点，典型的作文结构。在句式使用上，作者用法多样，使用了独立结构和虚拟语气，十分出彩。复杂的句式是本文的特点之一。
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好词1.wage v.发动2.aim v.瞄准3. advocate v.提倡
好句1. The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years.
教育部提倡我们每天做一个小时的运动，能够健康地活50年。
好处：advocate，其后接虚拟语气，可以省略情态动词。
2. If we did not do exercises, we wouldnt be able to get good study records.
如果我们不进行运动，我们的成绩就不会很好。
好处：虚拟语气
满分文(二)
Good afternoon, everyone,
Its my honor to be here to give you a speech. On April 29，2007 the national student sports program was held from 10∶00am~11∶00am in many primary and middle schools all over China. It is the Ministry of Education that promotes this program. In Jiangsu, about 11 milloin students took part in the activity.
The theme of this program is “do exercises for one hour per day, work for 50 years healthily and lead a happy life”. In my viewpoint, this is quite good for us senior students. We do exercises one hour a day and we can gain health, which lay a solid foundation for our future. That will be very good. So boys and girls，come and join us now!
Thank you!
名师点评：
文章的结构很清楚，内容和要点把握得也比较完整。本文十分符合演讲稿的要求，写得比较出色。第一段中用了强调句，指出了发起项目的主体。作者用并列的方式解释了主题，十分出色。定语从句也用的很好、很到位。
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好词1. promote v.促进2. foundation n.基础3. gain v.获得
好句1. It is the Ministry of Education that promotes this program.
是教育部推动了这个计划。
好处：强调句的使用十分准确。
2. We do exercises one hour a day and we can gain health, which lay a solid foundation for our future.
每天锻炼一小时我们的身体就会很健康，而这也为将来打下了坚实的基础。
好处：lay a solid foundation，为…打下坚实基础。
浙江卷：满分范文一
【满分范文】
满分文(一)
I prefer my English classes to be taught in both English and Chinese, whose advantage is that it is easy for us to understand what the teacher talks about. The teacher first teaches the class in English, and then she explains those that are hard to understand to us so that we get a better knowing of the passage. That will be good for us.
However, teaching the class in two languages will make the English atmosphere not so strong. Some students who wish to be taught in English will be disappointed.
Except for the disadvantage, I think it is really good to hear two languages in classes. It can make us more familiar with the foreign culture.
名师点评：
审题是作文的第一要素，本文的审题准确无误。无论是要点的把握还是结构的组织都证明了这一点。本文运用多种复杂句式，整体看来是不错的。文中的一个复合句式显示了作者的英语功底。其他出彩短语的使用也很地道，可以参看好句中的分析。
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好词1.advantage n.优点2.be familiar with，对某人熟悉3. atmosphere n.气氛
好句1. I prefer my English classes to be taught in both English and Chinese, whose advantage is that it is easy for us to understand what the teacher talks about.
我更喜欢采用双语教学，其优点是可以更好地理解老师的话。
好处：定语从句很好地组织了复杂句，同时prefer等词组的使用很地道。
2. Some students who wish to be taught in English will be disappointed.
那些希望英语授课的学生们可能会失望了。
好处：定语从句和wish to do的使用。
满分文(二)
I prefer my English classes to be taught only in English because it is helpful for us to improve the ability of speaking and listening in a very short time. I have strong interest in English study and foreign culture, so Id like to be totally immersed in the atmosphere of English so that I can quickly make progress. Thats why I prefer total English. However, since we are all English beginners, its really hard to understand all that the teacher says. Sometimes we need Chinese explanation. So my viewpoint is that we are taught not only in English but also using Chinese as a minor way to explain things that are hard to understand.
名师点评：
本文写作十分成功。语言和句式是本文最大的特点。好词中词汇的使用，将作者的意思表达得完整而准确，从而映衬了词汇的重要性；其次，本文的句式以复杂句为主，表语、定语和状语从句的使用都十分到位。
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好词：1. immerse v.沉浸2. explanation n.解释3. make progress 取得进步
好句：1. I have strong interest in English study and foreign culture, so Id like to be totally immersed in the atmosphere of English so that I can quickly make progress.
我对英语学习和外国文化有着浓厚的兴趣，因此我想沉浸在英语的学习氛围中，使得我能更快地进步。
好处：be immersed in 沉浸其中；so that 表示目的。
2. So my viewpoint is that we are taught not only in English but using Chinese as a minor way to explain things that are hard to understand.
因此，我的观点是，用英文教授，同时对于一些难以理解的内容用中文进行辅助讲解。
好处：表语从句使用正确。
满分文(一)
Dear Peter,
I am writing to ask whether you are able to do me a favor.
Since Im quite interested in English, I would like to make an English pen friend to improve my writing. Can you introduce one to me? My ideal pen friend should be of my age, and a boy will be better. A boy who likes traveling and football will be a good candidate.
In my opinion, the guy of my age will share almost the same experiences as me and it is easier to talk to each other. We can share our feelings of traveling and football. If possible, I hope that he likes pets. Hope you can find me an ideal pen friend.Thank you.
Best regards,
Li Hua
名师点评：
本文属于比较“平”的文章，即稳中求胜。文章没有华丽的词语，但是使用了一些短语和结构，能够获得老师的欣赏。首句是个原因状语从句。文章也运用了定语从句来修饰boy，比较好。If possible这个省略句则表明作者对这类状语从句的熟悉。
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好词：1. candidate n.候选人2.share with 与…分享
好句：In my opinion, the guy of my age will share almost the same experiences as me and it is easier to talk to each other.在我看来，像我这样年龄的男生和我会有更多的共同语言。
好处：复杂句的组合很好。
满分文(二)
Dear Peter,
I am writing to ask whether you are able to do me a favor.
I have been learning English for two years and I hope to find an English pen friend so that I can get more improvement. Can you help me to find one?
Id like to have a boy, who is of my age and is fond of traveling and sports, to be my pen friend. In my opinion, people of the same age often have something to exchange. Thats why I want him to be of my age. If he likes doggy, that would be better because I can tell him something about my little doggy.Id be very thankful if you can help me. Hope to hear from you!
Best regards,
Li Hua
名师点评：
从整体上来说，本文写得还是符合要求的，内容完整，要点和结构也很齐全。语言的使用不在于华丽的辞藻而在于其一些复杂句子的组织。最值得我们学习的就是像好词和好句中列举的表达法。全文流畅而连贯，适合于模仿。
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好词1.improvement n 改进2.do sb. a favor 帮助某人3. doggy n.小狗
好句1. Id like to have a boy, who is of my age and is fond of traveling and sports, to be my pen friend.我想寻找一个和我年纪相仿，喜欢旅游、体育的男孩来做我的笔友。
好处：of my age 年纪相仿；be fond of 喜欢。
2.Thats why I want him to be of my age，这就是为什么我希望笔友跟我年纪相仿的原因。
好处：用why引导的从句做表语从句。
全国卷II：满分范文一
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满分文(一)
Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!
Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.
500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, it provides singleperson room, of which the price is RMB100 yuan per day and the number is 20, and 15 doubleperson rooms, with a price of RMB 150 yuan per day. It also provides hot water bath service. You can enjoy both Chinese and western food in the restaurant and drink coffee and tea in the cafe. The swimming pool is open for free the whole day. All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable. So come to enjoy yourself!
Welcome to book rooms in Baishan Mountain.
名师点评：
本文开门见山，首先点明了主旨。本文最大的特点是应用了很多比较复杂的句式，使文章比较出彩。开头使用了独立结构交代宾馆位置。which引导的非限制性定语从句的使用也很正确。总地来说，文章句式精炼，是篇不错的满分作文。
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好词1. provide v.提供2. convenience n.便利
好句All these services can bring great convenience to you and are very enjoyable.
所有这些服务都会给你带来便利，并且非常的愉快。
好处：bring great convenience，带来便利。
满分文(二)
Welcome to Baishan Mountain Hotel!
Baishan Mountain Hotel is now open for business.
The hotel is located 500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, a very convenient position to go sightseeing in the Baishan Mountain. There are two kinds of rooms for service: singleperson room, 20 in total and RMB 100 yuan per day and doubleperson room, 15 in total and RMB 150 yuan per day. The hot water bath is provided as well. We serve both Chinses and western food in the restaurant as well as coffee and tea in the cafe. All are provided in a short time. The swimming pool, which is open for the whole day, is free for you to come.
We accept booking rooms ahead of time. So come and enjoy!
名师点评：
本文叙述比较详细，使用了比较复杂的句式和短语。首句的伴随状语用得很好。在介绍房间类型时，作者使用了简短的对比句式，很精炼。作者还使用了定语从句which，同时在描述酒店的两种价格的时候也很恰当，语句生动而不重复。
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好词1. sightseeing n.观光旅游2. book v.登记；预订
好句1. The hotel is located 500 meters far from the entrance of Baishan Mountain, a very convenient position to go sightseeing in the Baishan Mountain. 宾馆在距离白山入口处500米的地方，这对于参观白山来说是一个很方便的位置。
好处：伴随状语的使用很到位。
2. The swimming pool, which is open for the whole day, is free for you to come.
游泳池全天免费开放。
好处：which引导了非限制性定语从句。
北京卷：满分范文一
【满分范文】
第一节情景作文
满分文(一)
Dear Harry,
How are things going?
Last Monday, my class held the monitor election, a fierce competition between two students really. First, the two candidates, Liu Dong and Wang Hong, gave their election speeches respectively. Then other students wrote a name of the candidate on paper and put it into a box. The teacher counted the number of pieces of paper voting for the two candidates fairly. Finally, Wang Hong got 28 votes while Liu Dong got 15. So Wang Hong became our monitor. It was an interesting election, isnt it? Hope to hear from you.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
名师点评：
本文叙述内容完整而翔实。最突出的优点就是结构分明。作者通过使用了first，then，finally等表示顺序的词语，使文章层次感显得很强。其次，词语句式方面，作者也以简单句为主，增加了一份简练，流畅而自然。
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好词1.respectively ad.各自地2.vote v. 选举3.election n. 选举 4. fierce a.激烈的
好句1. Last Monday, my class held the monitor election, a fierce competition between two students really.上周一，我们班举行了一次班长选举，两个候选人竞争激烈。
好处：句式的使用很有特点。
2. Wang Hong got 28 votes while Liu Dong got 15.
王红得到了28票，而刘东得到了15票。
好处：while的使用很地道，表示并列情形。
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Dear Harry,
How are things going?
Last Monday, our class held the monitor election. The two candidates gave their speeches first and after that other students put the paper with the name of the ideal monitor into a box. The teacher made a calculation of the number of names voted by other students. At last the result was: Wang Hong got 28 votes while Liu Dong got 15. In that sense, Wang Hong won the election.
Id like to know how the monitor election is conducted in your class.Hope to hear from you.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
名师点评：
本文叙事平稳，内容完整。词语使用平实，语法运用恰到好处，以准确的表达拿到比较高的分数。本文按图叙事，用first, after that, at last连接，结构分明。长短句综合运用，句式富于变化。
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好词1. calculation n.计算2.candidate n.候选人
好句1. The teacher made a calculation of the number of names voted by other students.
老师将其他同学选出的名字加以汇总。
好处：voted，动词的过去分词作状语。
2. Id like to know how the monitor election is conducted in your class.
我想知道你们班班长竞选是如何进行的。
好处：how引导的从句做宾语。
第二节开放作文
There is a bird in the nest in the tree. She is the mother of her four children. Seeing her children flying happily in the sky, she feels very delighted. The four birds will be able to live independently and another circle of life will begin. How wonderful nature is!
名师点评：
本文发挥想象，设想四只小鸟即将飞离母亲的庇护去自己生存，并由此引出生命轮回。文章想象合理，展开得很恰当。语言生动而形象，作为一篇小作文，不但恰当而且值得学习。
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好词：1.independently ad.独立地2. another circle of life生命的新轮回
好句：Seeing her children flying happily in the sky, she feels very delighted.
看到孩子们在空中自由地翱翔，她感到很愉悦。
好处：现在分词作状语表示伴随状态。
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Xiao Hong, our monitor and one of my good friends, got a cold last Monday and has been in hospital for three days. We suggested seeing her to show our concern. So yesterday we went to the hospital. Since I have known for long that Xiao Hong is fond of doggy, I bought a very cute doggy toy before going there.
On seeing the toy, Xiao Hong couldnt help screaming. She hugged the toy which was so lovely and cute again and again. She was moved because we all came to see her. We expressed our hope that she could recover as soon as possible. I told her that the doggy represented my hope of her recovering and my cherishing of our friendship. I believe she will be well soon and come back to us again!
名师点评：
本文的写作让我们再一次领略到上海作文的水平。我觉得其优势主要体现在，其一，用词准确生动，即通过有难度的词汇的使用，将作者的意思准确地加以表达；其二，句式的变换和语法的应用，即表达的问题。上述二者兼而有之，分数怎能不高？
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好词：1. concern n.关心2. screaming a.尖叫的3.hug v.拥抱4.cherish v.珍爱
好句：1. We suggested seeing her to show our concern.
我们建议去看看她以表示我们对她的关心。
好处：suggest doing，建议做什么。
2. I told her that the doggy represented my hope of her recovering and my cherishing of our friendship.
我告诉她这个小狗代表了我希望她康复的愿望和对于我们友谊的珍爱。
好处：意思表达十分准确。
天津卷：满分范文一
【满分范文】
满分文(一)
How to Protect Our Eyesight
As we can see in the picture, nowadays most students wear glasses because they are shortsighted due to high study pressure. With the help of glasses, they can see the blackboard clearly.
This phenomenon must be paid attention to. We should reduce the time of reading and when we read, do read in the bright place so as to protect our eyes. Besides, the eye exercises are another way to keep eyes healthy. After school, wed better get more sleep so that the eyes can get more rest.
As the saying goes, eyes are the window of our hearts. If you can follow the methods mentioned above, you can surely have a good eyesight.
名校点评：
本文采用三段论的方式，分析图画，提出建议，提出希望，叙述比较详细。文中用了两个伴随状语，使得文章非常连贯。这个独立结构也很好。此外，作者还是用了比较复杂的句子，We should reduce the...采用复合结构，讲出了多个保护视力的要点。
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好词1. phenomenon n.现象2. so as to 以便
好句1. With the help of glasses, they can see the blackboard clearly.
在眼镜的辅助之下，他们才能将黑板看得更清楚。
好处：with引导状语表示伴随。
2. As the saying goes, eyes are the window of our hearts.
众所周知的是，眼睛是心灵的窗户。
好处：谚语的使用增光添彩。
满分文(二)
How to Protect Our Eyesight
Look at the picture and you will find the worrying phenomenon: most students now wear glasses. Because of unhealthy ways of using eyes and high study pressure, students get shortsighted easily.
However, we can do something to protect our eyes from getting shortsighted. When reading, make sure you are in the bright place and let your eyes rest every hour. If your eyes are aching,doing some eye exercises can relieve your eye tiredness. It will be good to your eyes to take enough sleep. I believe you can protect your eyes if you follow the tips.
Hope every one of you have a clear world!
名师点评：
本文审题准确，要点完整而齐全。从结构来说，首先提出问题，其次讨论如何及为什么需要解决问题。文章长短句结合使用，句式变换而流畅。文章用词地道而成熟，可以称得上是一篇不错的考场佳作。
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好词1. ache v. 疼痛2. pressure n. 压力3. relieve v.缓解
好句1. However, we can do something to protect our eyes from getting shortsighted.
然而我们可以采取一些措施来保护我们的眼睛免于近视。
好处：do something to，采取措施。
2. If your eyes are aching, doing some eye exercise can relieve your eye tiredness.
如果你的眼睛感到疼痛，做眼操可以缓解你的视力疲劳。
好处：动名词作主语引导从句。
重庆卷：满分范文一
【满分范文】
满分文(一)
Dear Amy,
Im Li Hua from Xinhua Middle School of China. Im sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brought you great pain. But you should realize that you are young and have a promising great future. So, stand up and fight against the disease! Im sure you will win. It is reported that the America anticancer association will donate three cents upon every comfort letter you receive. So I will tell your situation to all my friends and ask them to write to you. In that way, you will get enough money for you to be cured. Hope you can be well soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
名师点评：
本文依照要求，涵盖了所有要点。文章使用了高中常见的句式，如Im sorry to hear that..., It is reported that...等，都比较好。作者对定语从句的使用恰到好处地修饰了文章，行文自然而通顺，值得学习。
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好词1.realize v.意识到2.promise v.允诺3.donate v.捐赠
好句1. Im sorry to hear that you got the lung cancer which brings you great pain.
我很遗憾地得知你身患肺癌，给你带来了巨大的痛苦。
好处：which引导限制性定语从句。
2. So, stand up and fight against the disease!
因此，坚强地与疾病做斗争吧！
好处：掷地有声，语言准确。
满分文(二)
Dear Amy,
My name is Li Hua, a student from Xinhua Middle School in China. I have got to know that you got lung cancer and are in great pain. Sorry to hear that. But since you are young, the disease wont be very serious and you can beat it. It is said that the more letters you receive, the more money the America anticancer association will donate. For every letter, they give three cents. So I will try as hard as possible to persuade my friends to write to you so as to help you get enough money to cure the disease. Im sure you will be OK soon.
Yours,
Li Hua
名师点评：
文章整体来说一气呵成，衔接自然。通过诸如原因状语从句的使用，使得文章内容饱满，过渡自然，较好地使用了诸如but，so之类的连词。文章使用了“the +比较级，the +比较级”的句式，十分出彩。
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好词1. cure v.治愈2. association n.协会3.donate v.捐赠
好句1. But since you are young, the disease wont be very serious and you can beat it.
但是因为你还比较年轻，疾病不会很严重，你能够战胜它。
好处：since，引导原因状语从句。
2. It is said that the more letters you receive, the more money the America anticancer association will donate.
据说你收到的信越多，美国抗癌组织捐给你的钱就越多。
好处：the +比较级，表示强调。
江苏卷：满分范文一
【满分范文】
满分文(一)
Good afternoon, everyone,
The national student sports program, waged by the Ministry of Education and aimed at improving students health, was held from 10：00am~11:00am on April 29，2007 in many primary and middle schools all over China. Almost 11 million students in Jiangsu province participated in this program.
The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years. Our whole life will be very enjoyable.
In my opinion, we senior high school students should do exercises for one hour a day even though our spare time is limited. Health is a basic condition for our study. If we did not do exercises, we wouldnt be able to get good study records. So every one of you, join the program now!
Thank you!
名师点评：
本文的结构十分明晰，同时句式使用得熟练而准确。本文分为三段，前两段叙述，后一段发表观点，典型的作文结构。在句式使用上，作者用法多样，使用了独立结构和虚拟语气，十分出彩。复杂的句式是本文的特点之一。
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好词1.wage v.发动2.aim v.瞄准3. advocate v.提倡
好句1. The Ministry of Education advocates that we do exercises for one hour a day and can work healthily for 50 years.
教育部提倡我们每天做一个小时的运动，能够健康地活50年。
好处：advocate，其后接虚拟语气，可以省略情态动词。
2. If we did not do exercises, we wouldnt be able to get good study records.
如果我们不进行运动，我们的成绩就不会很好。
好处：虚拟语气
满分文(二)
Good afternoon, everyone,
Its my honor to be here to give you a speech. On April 29，2007 the national student sports program was held from 10∶00am~11∶00am in many primary and middle schools all over China. It is the Ministry of Education that promotes this program. In Jiangsu, about 11 milloin students took part in the activity.
The theme of this program is “do exercises for one hour per day, work for 50 years healthily and lead a happy life”. In my viewpoint, this is quite good for us senior students. We do exercises one hour a day and we can gain health, which lay a solid foundation for our future. That will be very good. So boys and girls，come and join us now!
Thank you!
名师点评：
文章的结构很清楚，内容和要点把握得也比较完整。本文十分符合演讲稿的要求，写得比较出色。第一段中用了强调句，指出了发起项目的主体。作者用并列的方式解释了主题，十分出色。定语从句也用的很好、很到位。
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好词1. promote v.促进2. foundation n.基础3. gain v.获得
好句1. It is the Ministry of Education that promotes this program.
是教育部推动了这个计划。
好处：强调句的使用十分准确。
2. We do exercises one hour a day and we can gain health, which lay a solid foundation for our future.
每天锻炼一小时我们的身体就会很健康，而这也为将来打下了坚实的基础。
好处：lay a solid foundation，为…打下坚实基础。
浙江卷：满分范文一
【满分范文】
满分文(一)
I prefer my English classes to be taught in both English and Chinese, whose advantage is that it is easy for us to understand what the teacher talks about. The teacher first teaches the class in English, and then she explains those that are hard to understand to us so that we get a better knowing of the passage. That will be good for us.
However, teaching the class in two languages will make the English atmosphere not so strong. Some students who wish to be taught in English will be disappointed.
Except for the disadvantage, I think it is really good to hear two languages in classes. It can make us more familiar with the foreign culture.
名师点评：
审题是作文的第一要素，本文的审题准确无误。无论是要点的把握还是结构的组织都证明了这一点。本文运用多种复杂句式，整体看来是不错的。文中的一个复合句式显示了作者的英语功底。其他出彩短语的使用也很地道，可以参看好句中的分析。
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好词1.advantage n.优点2.be familiar with，对某人熟悉3. atmosphere n.气氛
好句1. I prefer my English classes to be taught in both English and Chinese, whose advantage is that it is easy for us to understand what the teacher talks about.
我更喜欢采用双语教学，其优点是可以更好地理解老师的话。
好处：定语从句很好地组织了复杂句，同时prefer等词组的使用很地道。
2. Some students who wish to be taught in English will be disappointed.
那些希望英语授课的学生们可能会失望了。
好处：定语从句和wish to do的使用。
满分文(二)
I prefer my English classes to be taught only in English because it is helpful for us to improve the ability of speaking and listening in a very short time. I have strong interest in English study and foreign culture, so Id like to be totally immersed in the atmosphere of English so that I can quickly make progress. Thats why I prefer total English. However, since we are all English beginners, its really hard to understand all that the teacher says. Sometimes we need Chinese explanation. So my viewpoint is that we are taught not only in English but also using Chinese as a minor way to explain things that are hard to understand.
名师点评：
本文写作十分成功。语言和句式是本文最大的特点。好词中词汇的使用，将作者的意思表达得完整而准确，从而映衬了词汇的重要性；其次，本文的句式以复杂句为主，表语、定语和状语从句的使用都十分到位。
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好词：1. immerse v.沉浸2. explanation n.解释3. make progress 取得进步
好句：1. I have strong interest in English study and foreign culture, so Id like to be totally immersed in the atmosphere of English so that I can quickly make progress.
我对英语学习和外国文化有着浓厚的兴趣，因此我想沉浸在英语的学习氛围中，使得我能更快地进步。
好处：be immersed in 沉浸其中；so that 表示目的。
2. So my viewpoint is that we are taught not only in English but using Chinese as a minor way to explain things that are hard to understand.
因此，我的观点是，用英文教授，同时对于一些难以理解的内容用中文进行辅助讲解。
好处：表语从句使用正确。