2007年高考英语满分作文北京卷 上海卷 天津卷

北京卷
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第一节情景作文
假设你是李华，要给英国笔友Harry写封信，介绍你班两位同学竞选班长的过程。请按下图顺序描述。
注意：
1.信的开头已为你写好；
2.词数不少于60。
提示词：竞选班长monitor election
Dear Harry,
How are things going?
Last Monday,
Best wishes,
Li Hua
第二节开放作文
请根据下面提示，写一篇短文。词数不少于50。
In your English class, you are asked to describe the following picture and explain to your classmates how you understand it.
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第一节情景作文
满分文(一)
Dear Harry,
How are things going?
Last Monday, my class held the monitor election, a fierce competition between two students really. First, the two candidates, Liu Dong and Wang Hong, gave their election speeches respectively. Then other students wrote a name of the candidate on paper and put it into a box. The teacher counted the number of pieces of paper voting for the two candidates fairly. Finally, Wang Hong got 28 votes while Liu Dong got 15. So Wang Hong became our monitor. It was an interesting election, isnt it? Hope to hear from you.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
名师点评：
本文叙述内容完整而翔实。最突出的优点就是结构分明。作者通过使用了first，then，finally等表示顺序的词语，使文章层次感显得很强。其次，词语句式方面，作者也以简单句为主，增加了一份简练，流畅而自然。
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好词1.respectively ad.各自地2.vote v. 选举3.election n. 选举 4. fierce a.激烈的
好句1. Last Monday, my class held the monitor election, a fierce competition between two students really.上周一，我们班举行了一次班长选举，两个候选人竞争激烈。
好处：句式的使用很有特点。
2. Wang Hong got 28 votes while Liu Dong got 15.
王红得到了28票，而刘东得到了15票。
好处：while的使用很地道，表示并列情形。
满分文(二)
Dear Harry,
How are things going?
Last Monday, our class held the monitor election. The two candidates gave their speeches first and after that other students put the paper with the name of the ideal monitor into a box. The teacher made a calculation of the number of names voted by other students. At last the result was: Wang Hong got 28 votes while Liu Dong got 15. In that sense, Wang Hong won the election.
Id like to know how the monitor election is conducted in your class.Hope to hear from you.
Best wishes,
Li Hua
名师点评：
本文叙事平稳，内容完整。词语使用平实，语法运用恰到好处，以准确的表达拿到比较高的分数。本文按图叙事，用first, after that, at last连接，结构分明。长短句综合运用，句式富于变化。
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好词1. calculation n.计算2.candidate n.候选人
好句1. The teacher made a calculation of the number of names voted by other students.
老师将其他同学选出的名字加以汇总。
好处：voted，动词的过去分词作状语。
2. Id like to know how the monitor election is conducted in your class.
我想知道你们班班长竞选是如何进行的。
好处：how引导的从句做宾语。
第二节开放作文
There is a bird in the nest in the tree. She is the mother of her four children. Seeing her children flying happily in the sky, she feels very delighted. The four birds will be able to live independently and another circle of life will begin. How wonderful nature is!
名师点评：
本文发挥想象，设想四只小鸟即将飞离母亲的庇护去自己生存，并由此引出生命轮回。文章想象合理，展开得很恰当。语言生动而形象，作为一篇小作文，不但恰当而且值得学习。
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好词：1.independently ad.独立地2. another circle of life生命的新轮回
好句：Seeing her children flying happily in the sky, she feels very delighted.
看到孩子们在空中自由地翱翔，她感到很愉悦。
好处：现在分词作状语表示伴随状态。
上海卷
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Directions: Write an English composition in 120～150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
以“礼物”为主题写一篇作文。该文章必须包括以下内容：
1.你送礼物的对象及所送的礼物；
2.该礼物对他(她)可能产生的影响或带来的变化。
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Xiao Hong, our monitor and one of my good friends, got a cold last Monday and has been in hospital for three days. We suggested seeing her to show our concern. So yesterday we went to the hospital. Since I have known for long that Xiao Hong is fond of doggy, I bought a very cute doggy toy before going there.
On seeing the toy, Xiao Hong couldnt help screaming. She hugged the toy which was so lovely and cute again and again. She was moved because we all came to see her. We expressed our hope that she could recover as soon as possible. I told her that the doggy represented my hope of her recovering and my cherishing of our friendship. I believe she will be well soon and come back to us again!
名师点评：
本文的写作让我们再一次领略到上海作文的水平。我觉得其优势主要体现在，其一，用词准确生动，即通过有难度的词汇的使用，将作者的意思准确地加以表达；其二，句式的变换和语法的应用，即表达的问题。上述二者兼而有之，分数怎能不高？
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好词：1. concern n.关心2. screaming a.尖叫的3.hug v.拥抱4.cherish v.珍爱
好句：1. We suggested seeing her to show our concern.
我们建议去看看她以表示我们对她的关心。
好处：suggest doing，建议做什么。
2. I told her that the doggy represented my hope of her recovering and my cherishing of our friendship.
我告诉她这个小狗代表了我希望她康复的愿望和对于我们友谊的珍爱。
好处：意思表达十分准确。
天津卷
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假设你校举办看图征文活动，题目为“How to Protect Our Eyesight”。请你用英语写一篇短文，指出图中所反映的现象，并从阅读时间、光线、眼睛保健操及睡眠等方面，谈谈保护视力的具体做法。
注意：
1.词数：不少于100词；
2.可适当加入细节，以使行文连贯。
参考词汇：近视的：shortsighted
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满分文(一)
How to Protect Our Eyesight
As we can see in the picture, nowadays most students wear glasses because they are shortsighted due to high study pressure. With the help of glasses, they can see the blackboard clearly.
This phenomenon must be paid attention to. We should reduce the time of reading and when we read, do read in the bright place so as to protect our eyes. Besides, the eye exercises are another way to keep eyes healthy. After school, wed better get more sleep so that the eyes can get more rest.
As the saying goes, eyes are the window of our hearts. If you can follow the methods mentioned above, you can surely have a good eyesight.
名校点评：
本文采用三段论的方式，分析图画，提出建议，提出希望，叙述比较详细。文中用了两个伴随状语，使得文章非常连贯。这个独立结构也很好。此外，作者还是用了比较复杂的句子，We should reduce the...采用复合结构，讲出了多个保护视力的要点。
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好词1. phenomenon n.现象2. so as to 以便
好句1. With the help of glasses, they can see the blackboard clearly.
在眼镜的辅助之下，他们才能将黑板看得更清楚。
好处：with引导状语表示伴随。
2. As the saying goes, eyes are the window of our hearts.
众所周知的是，眼睛是心灵的窗户。
好处：谚语的使用增光添彩。
满分文(二)
How to Protect Our Eyesight
Look at the picture and you will find the worrying phenomenon: most students now wear glasses. Because of unhealthy ways of using eyes and high study pressure, students get shortsighted easily.
However, we can do something to protect our eyes from getting shortsighted. When reading, make sure you are in the bright place and let your eyes rest every hour. If your eyes are aching,doing some eye exercises can relieve your eye tiredness. It will be good to your eyes to take enough sleep. I believe you can protect your eyes if you follow the tips.
Hope every one of you have a clear world!
名师点评：
本文审题准确，要点完整而齐全。从结构来说，首先提出问题，其次讨论如何及为什么需要解决问题。文章长短句结合使用，句式变换而流畅。文章用词地道而成熟，可以称得上是一篇不错的考场佳作。
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好词1. ache v. 疼痛2. pressure n. 压力3. relieve v.缓解
好句1. However, we can do something to protect our eyes from getting shortsighted.
然而我们可以采取一些措施来保护我们的眼睛免于近视。
好处：do something to，采取措施。
2. If your eyes are aching, doing some eye exercise can relieve your eye tiredness.
如果你的眼睛感到疼痛，做眼操可以缓解你的视力疲劳。
好处：动名词作主语引导从句。