美国小学生的作文题和作文
－ 附儿子的作文
美国小学生5年级作文题择选：
１．《假如有一天你发现了一块飞毯》（飞毯是儿童故事书“阿拉丁”里会飞的魔毯）
提示：写作前，想想你会去哪儿，会看到什么，你会做些什么。写下一个你发现飞毯后的想象故事。
２．《一次想象的旅行》
提示：写作前，设想一个你向往的地方，想想你会在那儿干什么。
３．《动物都跑出来的动物园郊游》
提示：写作前，想象你的郊游会发生什么事，写一个动物园动物都逃出来的故事。
４．《假如我是风暴里的小雨滴》
提示：写作前，想象你作为雨滴的一天旅行，写下你的历险记。
我看完这些题目的感受就是：“哇，多有意思的题目！”看了就跃跃欲试地想写！比起我们小时候的《难忘的一件事》，《我的朋友》，《春游的一天》之类的作文题目好玩，在教育思路上和我们当时在中国上小学时有着天壤之别。
发现这些在州教育网上的作文题是源于儿子的一篇满分作文。
这天，儿子兴高采烈地回来报告，他的作文得了六分，是满分，老师在班上念了，还能送去州里当范文等等。我乍一高兴之下又满心狐疑，细细问了他写得什么题目，都写了些什么。听完后，仍是将信将疑。儿子有夸张他的成就的历史，不想轻易打击他的荣誉感，但赞扬他的几句多少有些言不由衷。
好在几天后就是我和儿子老师约的家长会，重要的一项就是证实儿子的话。别说，儿子说的基本属实，尽管还是有夸张之处（或是他一高兴没理解老师说的细节－他这篇是练习作文，州里正式考的得了满分大约才能送去当范文）。我要求看看这篇文章，他的班主任找出来念给我和在座的数学老师听，一边念，一边仍忍不住地笑，夸他实在是写得很有趣。故事环环相扣，用的比喻贴切生动，结尾出乎意料。我在讶异之中，几乎不相信这是儿子写的！
其实，我等这一天已经等了多年。
从儿子一年级开始，我就要求他写周记，到现在也有近五年了，几乎是没有间断过。从满篇错字、歪歪扭扭的几句话到现在能较通顺地记下一件事，有进步，但不理想。主要是写的都是流水账，平铺直叙，散淡无奇。
为此，我还给他买了教孩子写作的书，解释时间、地点、人物的重要；拿他喜欢的小说作范例讲解怎么注意细节的描写，用文字的叙述让人有身临其境之感。我不是在这边长大的，英文是我的第二语言，不是我的强项，相信将来孩子会比我强。但写作的基本要点是一样的，吸引人的故事无论用何种语言都是由同样的要素构成的。我自己小学时作文有了突然的长进就是从多读书，模仿好描写开始的。儿子练了这么久，读书不少，怎么顿悟的一刻迟迟不来？！
仅有一次他拿回家的作文我觉得写得挺有意思，想象力十足，自己看得津津有味，还拿去给同事看，大大表扬了他一下。谁知过几天问他老师有没有给他高分，儿子不是很在意地说老师只给了他二分，说他写得不好。我惊讶之余，不以为然，告诉儿子不要泄气，每个人的标准不一样，妈妈很喜欢这一篇。
现在想来，我对儿子的指导有着我自己成长的痕迹，没有考虑到孩子的经历和心理特点，有失误之处。教我六年语文的中学班主任在看了我的博客后曾经评论说，因为我的生活经历丰富了，博客比我中学时的周记写的生动有趣。是啊，在孩子这个年龄，他对生活的感受简单，他对人情世故基本不知，他的心理很单纯，只是让他记下生活的事情，他自然写得淡而无味。但是，孩子没有被生活琐事干扰过的心灵却有块不受约束、任其驰骋的田野，如果让他写想象中的故事，那真是天马行空，无拘无束的畅快！
有了这个启发，上周的周记，我就让儿子用了《一次想象的旅行》这个标题，他写了星际旅行，在火星上的历险，想象中又有现实生活的影响，在躲避另一些邪恶外星人的洗劫时，他来到了土星上的难民营。大约是新闻里经常可以听到的难民营给了他很深的印象。而我，则有些对儿子刮目相看了。
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附：儿子满分的作文（他写错的时态、字我没有改，保持原汁原味）
没有标题，下边是写作场景(时间限制是35分钟）：
Writing Situation: You are home babysitting your little brother. When you go out to get the paper, the door shuts and locks. Your baby brother is alone inside. Tell what you do.
Directions for Writing: Before you begin to write, think about what you and your brother might do if this happened. Now write a story about you and your brother's experiences.
下边是儿子的写作计划(明显他并没有按照自己的计划写）：
B(开头) － Parents go shopping; I go get my magazine; Door shuts and locks.
M(中间) － dog occupies baby; call police; they pick the lock.
E(结尾) － mom and dad comes home; happy
作文：
Yesterday, I was in monumental incident. I was really frightened, but I still stayed halcyon. That was how I got though the contretemp.
My parents left me home to take care of my baby brother. When they left my brother was still sleeping like a hybernating bear. I saw that no one had retrived the mail. So I go out as quiet as a mouse. I did that because I didn't want to disturb my wee little brother. As I tip toed out the door made a "creak" then there was a loud "slam!". The door had shut. And since our door was one of those old out of date ones, when it closed it immediately got locked.
I stood there, bewildered. The thought, " I going to be murdered when mom and dad finds out." I tried breaking the window. But when I met it, it was like trying to break titanium with a feather.
I even tried climbing to get to the open window. I fell halfway. I landed in a bush with what seemed like trillion of razor sharp needles. I swear if anyone saw me, They would say, "I saw a green porcipine today!" I soon tried everyting I could. I tried pole vaulting. I hit the wall with a loud "thud!" I even called police, But they were trying to catch a terrorist. I went to my neighbors' house, but they were on vacation. I got tired so I sat on a rock. Crestfallen like a kid down in the dumps. I slowly stand up like a crippled man with no walking stick. I tried opening the door and it open. So in the end I didn't really close the door. Now I am like a hungry wolf that sees a hobbling deer. I shout, "whoopiee!" That's how I got out of that crisis situation.
下边是州里的打分标准：
SCORE OF 6
A 6 paper is OUTSTANDING. It demonstrates a high degree of proficiency in response to the assignment but may have a few minor errors.
An essay in this category:
- is well organized and coherently developed
- clearly explains or illustrates key ideas
- demonstrates syntactic variety
- clearly displays facility in the use of language
- is generally free from errors in mechanics, usage, and sentence structure
SCORE OF 5
A 5 paper is STRONG. It demonstrates clear proficiency in response to the assignment and may have minor errors.
An essay in this category:
- is generally well organized and coherently developed
- explains or illustrates key ideas
- demonstrates some syntactic variety
- displays facility in the use of language
- is generally free from errors in mechanics, usage, and sentence structure
SCORE OF 4
A 4 paper is COMPETENT. It demonstrates proficiency in response to the assignment.
An essay in this category:
- is adequately organized and developed
- explains or illustrates some of the key ideas
- demonstrates adequate facility in the use of language
- may display some errors in mechanics, usage, or sentence structure
SCORE OF 3
A 3 paper is LIMITED. It demonstrates some degree of proficiency in response to the assignment, but it is clearly flawed.
An essay in this category reveals one or more of the following weaknesses:
- inadequate organization or development
- inadequate explanation or illustration of key ideas
- limited or inappropriate word choice
- a pattern or accumulation of errors in mechanics, usage, or sentence structure
SCORE OF 2
A 2 paper is FLAWED. It demonstrates limited proficiency in response to the assignment.
An essay in this category reveals one or more of the following weaknesses:
- weak organization or very little development
- little or no relevant detail
- serious errors in mechanics, usage, sentence structure, or word choice
SCORE OF 1
A 1 paper is DEFICIENT. It demonstrates fundamental deficiencies in writing skills.
An essay in this category contains serious and persistent writing errors or is incoherent or is undeveloped.
SCORE OF 0
A 0 paper is reported accompanied by one of the following codes to indicate a paper could not be scored for one of the following reasons:
- 0-A - Blank or Refusal
- 0-B - Insufficient to score or Illegible
- 0-C - Off Topic
- 0-D - Written predominantly in another language
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